Cops tend to talk bureaucratese. Probably in an effort to not sound like the people they have to arrest.

Hemingway said: I know all the big words, I just don't use 'em. (My neighbor says that, too. But he thinks he made it up.)

And Hemingway pretty much avoided adverbs and adjectives. (My neighbor doesn't know what adverbs and adjectives are.)

Since adverbs and adjectives and big words do exist, they should only be used sparingly and skillfully, with the kind of discretion that doesn't jar the reader.

I agree with Frank and GrandmaM. One always should consider purpose and audience when writing...be it a tweet, a novel, a mission statement, email, etc. Understanding purpose/occasion and targeted audience should help guide a writer's diction.

The statement from the sheriff's department reminds me of something I'd get from certain students when I was teaching freshman English at a local campus. The student had discovered the capability to insert synonyms instead of the original words, often leading to rather humorous results. It is possible to communicate without using highfaluting language; and when communicating with an audience of mixed educational backgrounds it's essential.

Bureaucratic writing has its place. Jargon has its place. Fancy writing has its place. Even long sentences can be effective.
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Check out the novels of Michael Chabon. His sentences are symphonies, sometimes. One reads them over and over for the sheer delight. (On the other hand, Mr. Hemmingway did fine with short sentences.)

I wouldn't have a problem with "assiduous commitment" in the right place, but it seems redundant here. "Fruition" is the real jargon word. And informing people of the informative again, seems like saying the same thing twice -- why would you inform people of the NON-informative news (unless, I guess, it's urgent)?
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Try to get down to the essentials, like "The Rock County Sheriff is committed to public safety and will update here with urgent or important news."
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Just googling around finds many law enforcement agencies with just the barest of information there such as a link to the official website or just their mission statement (i.e. for the department).

deweeze’ posts read like they were puréed in a blender before he vomited them into cyberspace via his keyboard.

deweeze, I hope that was an attempt at ironic humor.

Yes, deweeze, there are those teachers who are unable to “connect” with the young learner. You had at least one, based on your quickness to vilify teachers (that means to make them seem bad, deweeze). Just as that [insert any other job description] “fails” to clearly communicate with the public, or one’s subordinates, or one’s superiors, or neighbors.
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‘Doesn’t mean you should be so quick to broad brush all teachers of language skills as failing to achieve their goals.

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Acknowledge the successes of the many excellent and good teachers, deweeze, rather than suggest that ALL have failed to achieve their mission. Or at least use YOUR language skills to identify that very small population of marginally successful grammar skills.

deweeze is, apparently, among the horde that never learned this Truth: During those long ago days of one’s adolescence, the young, future writer may have been unable to “see” the need for writing well; could not have seen that years later all those grammar lessons would pay off. That good language skills would enhance one’s recreational and professional needs.
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Most of us grownups understand...and deweeze never learned [or has forgotten] the cruel nature of adolescence. Grammar and language often had no relevance during a time of “discovering self” amid all the roiling, confusing issues of being a tweenager and then teenager.

Deweeze is yet the most recent example of one from the masses who blindly attack teachers - “the schools” - public education. Clearly he/she has no experience in the classroom, nor has he/she experience with working with young people in general. And no, being a biological baby maker does not qualify him/her as a professional.
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Deweeze fails to understand several Truths about education. First, in the same way a child may have a strength, a “leaning”, a tendancy, an aptitude for painting or for math or for playing a sport, [ insert any other skill sets here ] that same child may LACK [we need italics] the essential key that would let/make the child excel at written or spoken language skills. Result, deweeze: NO failing on the part of any educator. Period.

My "grammer" once told me that when it comes to grammar it is best to be grammatically correct, even at the risk of being seen as overly-fastidious. However, I find Bureaucratic Jargonese to be an interesting facet of the English (American) language. I am always happy to see and read reporting of such events (offenses) and appreciate officers who are willing to continue their education. I truly believe this is the most efficacious way to provide fruitful future law enforcement through thorough reporting. Above all, I would want to avoid any fallacious presumptions about ticket avoidance. To be Frank, I would hope you agree.

This is a great example of a conflict I've had since junior high school: Over the years, we had to take various lessons in vocabulary; we were told that those who could master a sophisticated vocabulary would have the advantage of being better able to communicate. However, it seems now (and this has been the 'rule' for some time) the trend is NOT to use 'the big words'--because people don't know their meaning, and thus won't know what you are trying to say. Not to be too hyperbolic (oops...sorry...not to 'exaggerate too much for effect'), but wasn't that part of George Orwell's "1984" world--keeping the population LESS educated, in part by REMOVING words from dictionaries--because it's easier to control the masses when they are dumb? In other words, are we doing ourselves a favor in the long run by intentionally talking/writing 'down' to people?

Schools need to do a better job of teaching better grammer and writing skills. It is amazing how many people have graduated high school and cannot write a complete sentence let alone it be grammaticly (sp?) correct.

Boy, you are in a heap of trouble here...